1- Money making machine operates by blood.
2- You should have ended with the beginning to show the never ending cycle
Yeah I tried to put blood around the gears and "2" I wanted to do that but I'm not really sure about cycling animations, but thanks for the 5! I think it deserved that :)
In writing the story someone said: lets have two drunk guys one driving and one walking to show that shadows help drunk drivers?? Whats the message here? Good job almost killing yourself ( thumbs up)?
Drunk driving=bad. Thumbs up from the driver means he's gonna be alright.
So its drama
A teaser kind of gives the tone of a movie so I will go from there:
It is a crime drama and I cant help thinking that you have come up with the scene and you are now trying to build the story from it yet it is the teaser. Correct me if I am wrong. And this is a turn of events. The "good guy" comes to the bad guy's place because he killed one of his men. Maybe you are giving out the ending. And at the end of the video there was only a shot we didn't see the actual shooting which would make it safe to say that he will not really be shot but outside help will come. seen it in every movie when the hero is stuck. Introduce new character? After the climax? I don't think its a good idea. Maybe I sound a little mean but I want to push you to some original material. I don't want you to spend a lot of time doing something that has already been done.
Well i appreciate your input. It was more of a sample of what i will begin starting. basically short story is Main character walks into a gang territory and prevokes by shooting one of his guys. then runs and lures them to an alley where it is actually a trap where he is gunned down by a sniper on a rooftop nearby. sure it can be a bit cliche but its only a start. and i was anxious to get something done seeing as it took a good while to make. Alot more detail ad explaination when an actual episode is made.
Text and sound
I couldn't pause the thing so I had to mute the speakers. Dude..... Give us a chance to read the text. Three blocks of text went away in one second. And the sound is sooooooo annoying. Other than that the jokes are pretty well written. But please, my ears....
Well if I kept it any longer than the other dragon would start his roar and the text would overlap. And as funny as that would be, I'm not that mean. So LEARN2READ
So is your rating :D
Simple, Funny, Great.
I see that you understand how to write a joke but yet you didn't quite do it right. You need more set up. Like you show this guy, or clock face, writing document and preparing suff, having a business meeting shaking hands with with the other guy. He gets to the plane, show a map of the plane going to canada and then...... Now what?...... You see you need to build the expectations high and high and high and slam them to the grounds.......to newgrounds... sponsor :P
yeah there already was the build-up go watch the rest of the series dummy!!!!!!
Simple and funny
Sometimes it only takes 10 seconds to get 10 stars.
I hardly understoond anything from the story and don't know what to do now. Can you put instructions or something?
Half a funny
I can tell you watch family guy. Maybe when stewie said "at least its not raining" and it did. Maybe not. However, using a software to do the voices for you is funny only in some situations like for a robot. And there are better software that give less breaking between words.
I really don't watch family guy, that's called an obvious setup used in billions of everything.
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